9 Responses to Poverty Haiku Poem

1. brokenpemwriter says:

   June 13, 2011 at 9:00 pm

   This is WONDERFUL… the contrast of small, dirty mud and playing with the environment/circumstance he has, against the high, clean stars – bright with hope and possibility – and believing… dreaming of something better, though not knowing what better is… all that and more is contained in 14 words on three simple lines. Masterful!

2. jingle says:

   June 14, 2011 at 2:31 am

   Glad to see you write lovely haiku.

3. Bluebell Books says:

   June 14, 2011 at 2:32 am

   check out short story slam today, hope to see you share.

4. Write Girl says:

   June 14, 2011 at 2:50 am

   I agree that your haiku shows such a lovely contrast between the dirty world he inhabits and the starry world up above. Beautiful haiku.

5. Amanda Moore says:

   June 14, 2011 at 4:52 pm

   I wonder what he sees in those stars…. this is lovely!

6. Regina says:

   June 14, 2011 at 5:17 pm

   Hi there..ya, I enjoy haiku and don’t do this often enough..your contrast was inspirational and I enjoyed the tribute to your mom!
   Wishing you a wonderful week-

7. Leslie White says:

   June 15, 2011 at 2:48 am

   Wow. Profound. I see him, this child.

8. becca givens says:

   June 23, 2011 at 9:38 pm

   inspirational contrast conveyed well! thank you for sharing ~~

9. Hyper Jake says:

   June 27, 2011 at 9:22 pm

   Very interesting poem Marinela. You have so much diversity here. I encourage you to join our online community- The Poetry Castle– http://www.fliprap.com/forumdisplay.php?17-The-Poetry-Castle

   where you can post poems, meet other poets, join poetry battles, post poetry videos, and become a part of a good community